Monday, 31 May 2010

Mother's Love: 55 Fiction

Penned by Psych Babbler™ at 7:33 PM
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She showered all her love and attention on her newborn. She couldn’t understand her husband’s jealousy. Or his weird stares. Or sad face. But she didn’t care; her son needed her.

He finally couldn’t take it and showed her their son’s grave. He had been still born. 2 years ago.

Love can do strange things.

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43 penned views:

  1. eerie and tragic...
    Your story raised hair on the nape of my neck.
    All the best PB :)
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  2. Thanks LP! Glad it had that effect... :)
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  3. true Love can do strange things :)... Gr8 one!!!
    All the Best !!!
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  4. Nice twist. Good attempt. But it was not as good as your post on Blog-a-ton 'escape'.I feel you could have shown that the child was dead in a better way.
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  5. Yes, it had that effect on me too.... hairs standing up....
    but I don't like sad endings :(
    But I love ur post... :)
    Keep at it PB... that was some writing
    Raiders on a roll :):)
    Hurray!
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  6. OMG. That was hard-hitting. One of the best 55-ers I've read.
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  7. I'm dumbfounded!! No words to express....
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  8. Disturbing!! But it really lingers ....
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  9. this is so damn sad! it is difficult to get over such a tragedy and trauma!

    good luck for the contest..
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  11. Ow that was sad... A case of love driving people crazy here...
    Well written in 55 words...
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  14. Raiders are so awesome :) Great post PB :D
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  15. hey all the best and this is a nice 55er... sad story but as you say love has weird ways ...
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  16. took my tiny brain a while to get that... i misunderstood it at first and I was like what has she written? But when I did, all i could say is wow! I would have written a huge story to get that scene out and u got it in a fiction 55? Wow again!

    Cheers!
    Taviish
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  17. Mother's love. That was something. Nice! :)
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  18. nice one, got the impact.
    cheers
    GB
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  19. Thanks...but in 55 words, still born was the best option :)
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  20. Hehe Pinny...I'm a morbid person! I do like sad endings compared to happily ever after predictable endings... =D Thanks!
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  21. Wow Pal! Thanks heaps for that comment...means a lot... =)
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  23. Yeah, pretty morbid, isn't it? I'll take the lingering as a compliment =)
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  24. And Welcome to my blog Ritu...
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  25. Thanks Neha...good luck to you too!
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  26. Hehe...thanks T! You are like me with the sad endings! =)
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  28. Welcome Puj! And I'm glad it had the goosebump feel to it...it means it delivered the message all right! :)
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  29. Yay Avada! Thanks! Go Raiders...
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  31. Lol Tavish...and thanks for the lovely comment...means a lot! =)
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  34. ohhhh I love the header so much :D v v nice!
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  35. Thanks T! Another of my sister's creations...I'm still a bit partial to the previous one but like this one too =)
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  36. I meant - 'showed her the son's grave' - i felt that somehow it did not logically fit and could have been slightly tweaked to give a better effect. She is obviously gone crazy because she knows her son is dead but had begun to believe he is alive. So what will showing her the grave accomplish?
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  37. Been reading your posts for a long time - delurked now
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  38. Given that the son was still born, she has been depressed and deluded since...the showing of the grave is meant to represent a reality check...a step towards getting her to accept what has happened.
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  39. Ah...well, I'm really glad you de-lurked! =)
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  40. You have expressed deepest feelings in just 55 !!
    so nice creation...
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  43. Thanks...it obviously did it's job...
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